I'm going to be completely honest with you, and whatever i say is meant to help you improve.

First of all the overall composition is good, the colours work well and are nice and clear (except the colours near her hand). Her proportions are good though her eyes are too high up.

However the way you have painted (not sure what medium you used) this has left marks behind and such. You can stop this happening by using a soft brush which is wide enough for the size paper you are using.

The blue has leaked out of the border which makes it look a bit sloppy, however mistakes happen . For the clouds it is better to work back on top instead of leaving a gap because it makes it look flat and unfinished, and for this you can add light greys for shadows are darker areas to blend them in better. You can also try a stipling effect using a brush or tissue (depending on the media used also) which can make it look fluffy.

As for the sun's rays they look a bit sloppy too as the colours have blended to make bits of green. What you can do with this is use a watery white mixed with a tiny bit of yellow and stroke away from the sun with your brush to give a more realistic ray look.

What is in the girl's hands is also too muddy and it also looks a bit messy and because of the background, the yellow hasnt worked. To make this work better i'd either use a darker colour or make a thicker more intense colour with the media and work when everything is dry.

To make the whole piece look better you need to work on your highlights and shadows, this will help give your piece a more 3D look.

Annnnd that little mouse is so cute! It is well proportioned, however from this angle you'd only be able to see one ear.

For reference you can browse stock websites and DA has a stock gallery here. You can use it to help make your images look better in realism and for practice

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have you tried any Gouache? you can make it look just like markers, but without the stripes. XD it's nice to see Charlie in a drawing.

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Finally an illustration! My prayers/general naggings have been answered!!! Charlie looks exactly how I pictured her too! I cannot wait to see what Jaden & Mirhae look like! GAH!

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I would if I could find any at the studio. I love gouache! (Even though it's hard to spell)
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T_T you get free paint?

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Only at NUA. Or I bum it off my art major friends. ^_^

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lucky you're so close to NUA

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Yup! Just a 20 minute walk, if I go slow. It's good exercise. :3

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Did you color this in marker? It scanned very well.

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